Proposal Revision

The first day of college is more of a reality check than it is fun. Especially being a commuter at the University of Houston. The majority of the students at UH are commuters. This crowds the streets and parking lots around the school the first few weeks of a new semester. This also causes the parking lots to overflow with people who may or may not have a parking permit. An unknowing freshman will show up an hour early for their class, ready to start a new chapter in their life, only to find that they spend that hour plus maybe the next two looking around searching for a parking space. This is something every UH student goes through at least once in their career as a Cougar. It is inevitable especially with the school taking parking lots and putting dorms up in those areas that are much needed. I understand wanting to make this school more appealing to those out of state and country but this school has a certain duty to its existing students that have paid the tuition and put in the hours of work. I would understand if the dorms put up were affordable and offered to those who do commute but the new dorms are more expensive than living three minutes away from the school and some are only offered to freshmen. Cutting out over half of their population UH is making a bad step in doing this but that is an entirely different point. Any major university in Texas has a plethora of parking garages to eliminate this problem. I think that if UH were to put this first before trying to appeal to the younger soon-to-be students they will be more successful and keep their students happy but also attract more students. Their duty to us, as a student, is to help us in every way possible to get an education. By not having parking situated and forcing students to be late to class regardless of how early they arrive they are hindering our education and forcing some students to work harder when not necessary. There is already enough stress on college students this should not be added to it. I propose that the University of Houston add more parking garages on campus with affordable permits available to all students.

Proposal First Draft

The first day of college is more of a reality check than it is fun. Especially being a commuter at the University of Houston. The majority of the students at UH are commuters. This crowds the streets and parking lots around the school the first few weeks of school. This also causes the parking lots to overflow with people with and without permits. The parking attendants love these days because they are the prime time to meet that quota they are given, sometimes giving tickets to students who have permits but are parking the wrong lot because some jerk parked in their lot without a permit. An unknowing freshman will show up an hour early for their class only to find that they spend that hour plus maybe up to the next two looking around searching for a parking space. This is something every UH student goes through at least once in their career as a Cougar. It is inevitable especially with the school taking parking lots and putting dorms up in those areas that are much needed. I understand wanting to make this school more appealing to those out of state and country but this school has a certain duty to its existing students that have paid the tuition and put in the hours of work. I would understand if the dorms put up were affordable and offered to those who do commute but the new dorms are more expensive than living three minutes away from the school and only offered to freshmen students. Cutting out over half of their population UH is making a bad step in doing this but that is an entirely different point. UH needs to not put up new dorms on these parking lots but tall parking garages to solve the parking problem. Any major university has a plethora of parking garages to eliminate this problem. I think that if UH were to put this first before trying to appeal to the younger soon-to-be students they will be more successful and keep their students happy but also attract more students to this school. A university should be thankful for any student wanting an education and coming to this school whether they are the commuter or the new international freshman staying on campus. Their duty to us is to help us in every way possible to get an education. By not having parking situated and forcing students to be late to class regardless of how early they arrive they are hindering our education and forcing some students to work harder when not necessary. There is already enough stress on college students this should not be added to it.

Causal Argument Topic

The topic I have chosen for this essay is Musicians and Math. My research question is, Does excelling in music cause an individual to excel in mathematics? I intend to explain the correlation of the two subjects that seem to be on opposite ends of the spectrum.

I chose this topic because music has been a part of my life for as long as I can remember. I have also excelled at math my entire life. Many of my choir teachers have told me in the past that musicians are generally better at math because it is part of the foundation of music, in the rhythms and patterns. I love music and the many effects it has on emotions. The way music can be interpreted is beautiful to me. The fact that it could possibly effect people mentally by helping them academically is extremely intriguing to me. I want to know more about how music can be influential in life. It has influenced me in many ways, including excelling in mathematics. They tell pregnant mothers to listen to classical music while the baby is in the womb because it will help the baby be smarter. That is so amazing to me! My main career goals in life are to be an elementary math teacher but I also want to teach voice lessons to kids. Being able to link the two would be exponentially helpful to my career goals. It also combines my two main interests.

Some possible topics I may cover in my paper are the parts of the brain that are active during the two processes of math and music. Or maybe the different effects music has on individuals, such as mentally, emotionally, physically. I also want to explore the ages that music is most influential towards the brain.

Visual Arguments

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Doubting

In order to be successful one needs College and the proper training in their chosen field. Without the extra schooling one cAnnot expect to be successful in anything but waiting tables or working at the local mall. When people argue that people without degrees make S much money or are as successful as those that have degrees I have a hard time to believe that. Why have the degree plans for those fields if they are not needed. With so many in college today I can’t wrap my head around the concept of them doing something not needed. General contrActors that have been doing this for years arent as qualified as those that have graduated with a degree in construction management. An employer likes to see that one has the drive to challenge themselves with he extra schooling. Two men going up for the same job one with the a degree and the other without I would be willing to be that the man with a degree gets the job.
To be a school teacher, doctor, engineer, or a psychologist a degree is required. No one will trust a self proclaimed doctor or engineer. The degree is needed to snag the jobs now that promise a large income. Even football players in the NFL must go to college in order to be noticed by a scouter. One never hears of a high school boy that is instantly drafted into the NFL. More than just a high school diploma Is needed fir job security and success.

Believing

Believing

I totally believe that college is not a necessity for success. Yes, in some ways it is needed for some jobs but not all. If one is aspiring to be a doctor then college is necessary. People would not trust their doctor if they didn’t have that degree and years of schooling past high school. To be a trusted teacher it is expected that one has a degree and the certification needed. But, the best construction managers out there haven’t spent hours in the classroom but out on the sites working and learning that trade. The man that I would trust
to fix my roof isn’t one that has had no experience but years of school but the man thal has been fixing roofs for years. But a parent will not trust a daycare babysitter to teach their children the knowledge needed.
There is too much faith in the college education. People now do not see college as an oppurtunity to be more knowledgAble but as a quick fix to make lots of money fast. A dieticians starting salary is
significantly less than that of a general contractor. But the general contractor didn’t spend four years in a classroom and thousands of dollars on his education to get their. College is not needed to be successful and college will not solve the issue of making the most money. One just needs to be the best at whatever they do whether they have that four year degree or not.